I believe it was EB White who told William Strunk, Jr. (Elements of Style) to "Omit needless words."
I've taken that advice to heart. Extra words can bog down the pace and make the reading experience bumpy. I have a whole list of words I look for in final revisions to make sure there's not a plague of them. Some of those are (drumroll please)...
Examples: The force field appeared to wobble. (weaker)
The force field wobbled. (stronger)
Jayden saw Serenya sitting at the piano in her pretty red dress. (weaker)
Serenya sat at the piano in her pretty red dress. (stronger)
And now for a little example of how I take out unneeded actions. Take this little excerpt from Serenya's Song, Chapter 13, for instance (in Jayden's POV):
The path brightened as we rode out of the trees. Serenya reined in her horse at the edge of the clearing. I halted Trick beside her. She smiled and inclined her head toward the scenery in front of us. I’d seen it this morning from another vantage point, but now the afternoon sun and the appreciation in Serenya’s eyes brought the place to life. The huge vineyard striped the rolling hills. Rows of trellises loaded with corbet vines treated my eyes to a sea of golden fall color.
I looked at Serenya. She(Serenya) wore a proud smile. “I know you’ve already seen it, but isn’t it beautiful here?”“It’s remarkable.”She dismounted and held a hand above her eyes to block the sun. “I love this spot. The view is perfect. We just had the harvest a month ago. Time to open last year’s casks.”“Great timing with the Opera coming.”“Exactly,” she answered with a laugh.I slid out of the saddle(.) and admired the view as well.“You love Summerwind, don’t you?” She nodded.“I can’t imagine a more beautiful place. Of course, you’ve probably seen all sorts of things I’ll never see.”
Here, I've taken out some actions that are not necessary. I think Stephen King (in On Writing) referred to these as "stage directions". First of all, you don't have to mention characters looking at each other that much, unless the look is really key to the scene. Saying Serenya wore a proud smile SHOWS us that Jayden is looking at her. Secondly, you can see from the first paragraph that Jayden is admiring the view, so the line "and admired the view as well" isn't really necessary. Third, my characters start nodding so much that they look like bobble heads, so things like "She nodded" are often unnecessary and can be inferred by the reader from the dialogue alone.
***Remember: Your goal as a writer is for the reader to see your story, not your words.
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